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June’s Big Fight: The Finalists

Hey guys, wasn’t that little writing exercise fun? Admit it, it got your juices flowing, right? I received so many really great entries this month that I’ve decided to pick four finalists instead of three (yes, that’s what I did last month, so why I don’t I just pick four each time, huh? Well, if I mean to pick four, I’ll end up picking five… and so on and so forth). You guys know the song and dance… the entry that garners the most vote wins. Good luck, finalists!

This month’s finalists are chockful of drama and darkness. Me lurvez it!

Erin

He took a step closer. “You’re angry, Mary Ellen.…”

Mary Ellen stepped back.. Distance was required to keep the rage-waves rolling freely; if anything was going to bounce off anything, please God it was her knee-cap from his free-range wang.

“I’m pretty used to every mammal in Manolos clinging to you like busty little koalas. But in Trinidad…”

John sighed. It was a perfect sigh, full of long-suffering, tinged with patience, a soupcon of humor. “I’ve told you a million times – “

She rolled her eyes. “Yeah, a million times that you guys got lost. And a million times I bought that sorry-ass line, but this time. . . well — Adrianne.

She’d thought she’d glory in seeing how suddenly he grew silent, sliced to the bone.

She didn’t.

“I’m not just leaving you because you cheat, John. Let someone else have you; I am strangely ok with that.” Liar.

One last step forward, the better to sink my teeth into you, and oh, is it really over?

“I’m leaving you because every time you come, you call me Melon. I am Mary goddamned Ellen, and the next time you want to screw a melon, you’re gonna have to buy a fucking cantaloupe.”

Caitlin

“Bitch.” Hugh spat the word and it landed like acid against Catherine’s heart. Eyes fully black, any humanity he’d kept after 200 years of un-death drowning, he circled her.

“Hugh,” Catherine said. “Calm down. All I said was we may need to take some time, be apart.”

“I left for you,” he said, and his accent had returned fully, rich tones of Jane Austen novels, the Ton, dancing the minuet. “For you, I left behind everything the Coven afforded me. For you, I risk my life by the day. I chose to be with a Death-Stalker, a human, and see how I am rewarded.”

Human stung harder than bitch, but Hugh closed distance between them and Catherine forced herself into action. “Hugh…please don’t…” His snarl covered her voice.

He lunged, teeth growing to bone-needles, and she struck with the silver strapped at her wrist, tears forming. Hugh didn’t ash. He just stilled, fell.

Catherine sank next to him, hand on the silver in his mummified heart. Hugh stared up at her emptily, not dead but not her Hugh. Just a Coven vampire, again. “All I said was I needed time,” Catherine whispered. “Surely, Hugh…the one thing we have is time.”

Bettie

“Bastard!”

He caught her wrist before her palm connected with his stubbled cheek. His big hand squeezed her delicate bones while his finger pressed against the place where her pulse hammered hard beneath her skin.

“You called me a snake the night we met,” he growled.

She shivered at the memory of his wicked white smile by moonlight. She had called him the Prince of Lies and he’d laughed before he kissed her.

His voice dropped to a whisper. “Did you think my scales would change to skin if you spread your legs for me?”

“I thought you loved me.”

His full lips stretched into a cruel smirk. “You’ve read too many fairytales, Rosalind. The beast doesn’t always turn into a prince when the beauty kisses him. Sometimes the beauty grows teeth and claws. Creatures like us do not love.”

“I’m not like you!” She lashed at him with her free hand, faster this time and with more force. Her nails scored a set of bloody scratches along his cheek.

He grabbed her hand and pressed it to his lips. “Your claws are coming along quite nicely, my dear.”

She closed her eyes. He licked his blood from her fingertips.

This last one… is more bittersweet than anything. And it’s sad… and written by a boy. *sniff*

Nathan

They were lying on the hill, looking up at the blue sky when she asked the question.

“If you wanted any job in the world, what would you want to be?”

He sighed. He should’ve known that she was going to ask sooner or later…

“I would want to save the world.”

She slapped his stomach. “Come on, be serious.”

“ I am serious. I want to be the one to reverse the greenhouse effect, to be the one who creates sludge-eating bacteria. There’s nothing wrong in that.”

She sat up, looked at him. “But you’re a lit writing major.”

He shrugged. “So? I’d sell a few books, get a financial foundation going, present ideas to researchers, and start the company. It’d turn out okay in the end.” It felt like acid was burning through his stomach while he talked, but it was the truth, no matter how foolish it sounded.

She looked at him for what seemed to be an eternity, and then she chuckled long and low. “You’re a beautiful dreamer,” she told him, pecking him lightly on the mouth. “Beautiful, but just a dreamer.”

Then she got up, walked away, and he never saw her again.

… so there you have it. Your vote decides which of these literary wizards will win this month’s contest and awarded a $50 gift certificate to Amazon or B&N. I will announce the winner on Friday morning. Happy voting!

Warning: The knitting of sock-puppets will not be tolerated. Seriously, that shit is not funny.

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48 Responses to “June’s Big Fight: The Finalists”

  1. Ann(ie)
    Posted: Jun 5th, 2007 at 6:43 pm
    1

    Caitlin ftw!

  2. Taekduu
    Posted: Jun 5th, 2007 at 6:54 pm
    2

    This was really hard. I was so torn between the first three. But then I thought about which one I really wanted to read the rest of the story…. and it came to Bettie and Erin. So… I vote for Bettie. It’s so hard.

  3. Carrie Lofty
    Posted: Jun 5th, 2007 at 7:08 pm
    3

    Bettie :)

  4. Catherine
    Posted: Jun 5th, 2007 at 8:57 pm
    4

    Bettie

  5. Samantha
    Posted: Jun 5th, 2007 at 9:31 pm
    5

    Bettie - that was so delicate, but hot :) .

  6. Jena
    Posted: Jun 5th, 2007 at 10:19 pm
    6

    Caitlin, for sure. Full story, full characters, and a satisfying ending. Works for me.

  7. danette
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 12:34 am
    7

    Nathan

  8. Riviera
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 1:31 am
    8

    Caitlin!

  9. Tumperkin
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 2:01 am
    9

    Bettie for me. Grabbed me the first time I read it.

  10. David Bridger
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 3:18 am
    10

    Caitlin’s is beautiful and poignant.

  11. Crystal B.
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 4:03 am
    11

    Bettie

  12. KB Wagers
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 4:49 am
    12

    Caitlin! (though that was hard, they were all good)

  13. shuzluva
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 5:19 am
    13

    Nathan’s is poignant more than anything so I’m having a hard time seeing it as a fight - it’s more a painful soul bearing moment. I was torn by the first three when I originally read them, and I’m torn again. But I gotta go with Bettie. Nasty, sexy, hot and miserable all at the same time. NICE!

  14. Alyssa
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 7:17 am
    14

    Bettie! Really really good, that one.

  15. Kismet
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 9:17 am
    15

    Caitlyn!

  16. Tyhitia
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 9:18 am
    16

    They were all really good, but Caitlin’s is the best! Caitlin has my vote!

  17. Karen
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 10:17 am
    17

    I really like Nathan’s but as someone has already mentioned it’s not really a “fight” scene. Next in line and my vote is Bettie.

  18. Sean
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 10:23 am
    18

    Caitlin

  19. Will
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 10:24 am
    19

    Caitlin, by far. Not even close.

  20. Jackie
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 10:56 am
    20

    Caitlin

  21. Jeaniene
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 11:06 am
    21

    My vote’s for Caitlin!

  22. Stacie
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 11:20 am
    22

    Hugh and Catherine’s story really intrigued me. I wish I could read more!

    Caitlin’s story has my vote.

  23. Mark
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 11:46 am
    23

    Caitlin! She had me at “bone needles”.

  24. Richelle Mead
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 12:57 pm
    24

    Caitlin rocks the house.

  25. Melissa
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 1:15 pm
    25

    Caitlin :)

  26. celeber
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 1:55 pm
    26

    I am torn between Caitlin and Nathan.

    Eenie Meenie minie Mo.

    I am going to go with Nathan.

  27. Ravenna
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 1:57 pm
    27

    Caitlin!

  28. Kaitlin
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 2:19 pm
    28

    I like 1 & 2. Um….I say Erin. It was funny. I like the whole Melon, Mary Ellen comment. Cracked me up! :)

  29. Nan
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 2:35 pm
    29

    Oh Nathan… you broke my heart.

  30. Pamela
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 3:07 pm
    30

    Way coooool…..I love Caitlin’s writing!

  31. Emily
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 4:19 pm
    31

    Oooh…these are wonderful! I especially love Betty’s and Caitlin’s.

    I’d say that my final vote would have to go to Caitlin, though.

  32. Ez
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 4:54 pm
    32

    I vote Caitlin.

  33. Dan
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 5:12 pm
    33

    Caitlin

  34. SweetNSourGirl
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 6:57 pm
    34

    Bettie!

  35. Rachel
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 6:59 pm
    35

    Caitlin.

  36. Barrie
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 8:21 pm
    36

    Caitlin

  37. spiffikins
    Posted: Jun 6th, 2007 at 8:24 pm
    37

    Torn between Caitlin and Bettie - I think I’ll have to go with Caitlin, though it was a tough choice!

  38. Michael
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 1:21 am
    38

    Caitlin!

  39. Shiloh
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 3:32 am
    39

    I gotta go with Nathan.

    And daggone, I missed the contest this month. See what happens when I try to help somebody out? Sulk. I love angst. I love fights.

    sigh….

  40. Gina
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 3:35 am
    40

    Caitlin

  41. P_Sunshine
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 6:33 am
    41

    Caitlin! Had me at “Bitch” and didn’t let me down from there.

  42. Babz
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 6:40 am
    42

    Bettie

  43. Eilonwy
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 7:09 am
    43

    Bettie

  44. Nikki
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 10:17 am
    44

    Caitlin. Sucked me right in, tractor beam.

  45. Jason
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 11:49 am
    45

    Caitlin. . .

  46. BevL(QB)
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 3:47 pm
    46

    Caitlin- I want to know what led them up to this point, I want to know what happened to Catherine after this scene.

    But I can see how you had a hard time choosing just three. They were ALL really engaging.

  47. Josie
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 4:32 pm
    47

    Bettie

  48. Katie Ann
    Posted: Jun 7th, 2007 at 6:20 pm
    48

    Caitlin, though Bettie’s was close. Totally want to read the rest of Caitlin’s.

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